Clear and effective writing, editing and research services. Thanks for the opportunity to bid on your project.
My bid is $200 for 10 pages of flawlessly-written content, with each page containing at least 500 words, all chosen to grip the readers' attention and deliver your message.
Drew: I looked at your main page. In my opinion it suffers from over-selling (the overuse of exclamation marks, red-colored text, hard-sell phrasing, etc.) as well as being far too wordy/
You do a good job of selling the dream (be that rare, successful comedian) yet the lengthy outpouring becomes more of a screed and less of a focsed sales pitch... I'd recommend re-writing, editing, and dividing the material into make-sense sections on separate pages.
Your current format and text try to fit everything-- Content, testimonial, educational information, blog, etc. all into package, yet I believe your presentation would benefit from refining and crystallizing your message.
Please see my attached sample web content, a press release.
Thanks again for the opportunity to bid on your project!
Ed